The prose in this VN is pretty average. For something so beautiful, I expected more from the writing team.
A lot of things happened that didn't make sense, and no, I am not referring to the situation the characters find themselves in. I mean their emotional and rational reactions and thought processes.
I mean no offense, but is the writer (or at least the one planning the scenes) autistic? Or is the MC supposed to be autistic?
It is extremely frustrating and uncomfortable to experience the story in his POV and none of the characters are acting normally. So I have to assume the writer is the one at fault, or it was intentional because they want us to experience what it is like being in an autistic person's POV.
I recommend you take a BIG step back and put on the shoes of your characters when writing them, their motivations, and so on. This feels like a single person who doesnt know how people normally interact is playing with them like dolls.
That first part was INTENSE! I hope you keep this VN alive, no matter how long it takes. Tiene mucho potencial esta historia, por favor, no la dejen morir.
Love the game and the theme surrounding it. I know the game is still somewhat in early stages, but man am I looking forward for the upcoming updates. Take all the time you guys need, I started my own VN, got in it for about 3 months, stopped. Underestimated how damn time extensive it is. Got a lot of respect to the authors and creators out there. Goodluck on the Project!
Hello! I found the game very interesting and cool, and I wanted to know if you are thinking about translating the game into Portuguese? I particularly liked it a lot, and being a Brazilian, I would really like to play this game again in Portuguese!
Hello! Thank you so much for your kind words and enthusiasm about the game! We’re thrilled to hear that you enjoyed it. Once the game is finished, we’re planning to add official translations of a few languages, including Portuguese, so anyone can fully enjoy it!
I'm really excited about this! It would be great to have a Portuguese translation. And one more thing, I wanted to report a problem, during gameplay, randomly, the game crashes and closes. Honestly, I have no idea what's going on. I tried searching about this problem on YouTube but I couldn't find anything. I wanted to ask if you guys know what's going on?
(Note: The issue is happening on the Android version)
I'm a representative of the"Fluffy Paw", visual novel translation team of enthusiasts. We are interested in your visual novel and would like to work on its translation into Russian.
Therefore, I'm writing to ask for your permission to translate your visual novel and publish translated version on our boosty(https://boosty.to/ruwoolf). We post translation of the novel for a paid subscription for a period of two weeks, and afterwards we publish it for free public access.
Without any doubts, our side is ready to assure :
1) That we won`t translate or publish your novel builds if they are considered in paid access on your Patreon (or other recourses). We translate and publish only public builds of novels.
2) We make sure to include a link to your original novel and your social media as the author of the novel.
3) If you are interested in a Russian translation, we will also be able to send you tl russian files so that you can directly implement the translation into your work.
We are looking forward for your answer. Have a great day )
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not even two minutes in and I'm already getting flashbacks 😭
i can't unsee this his nose looks like a smiley face :)
Rereading for a third time while waiting for v0.3 :]
The prose in this VN is pretty average. For something so beautiful, I expected more from the writing team.
A lot of things happened that didn't make sense, and no, I am not referring to the situation the characters find themselves in. I mean their emotional and rational reactions and thought processes.
I mean no offense, but is the writer (or at least the one planning the scenes) autistic? Or is the MC supposed to be autistic?
It is extremely frustrating and uncomfortable to experience the story in his POV and none of the characters are acting normally. So I have to assume the writer is the one at fault, or it was intentional because they want us to experience what it is like being in an autistic person's POV.
I recommend you take a BIG step back and put on the shoes of your characters when writing them, their motivations, and so on. This feels like a single person who doesnt know how people normally interact is playing with them like dolls.
That first part was INTENSE! I hope you keep this VN alive, no matter how long it takes. Tiene mucho potencial esta historia, por favor, no la dejen morir.
Love the game and the theme surrounding it. I know the game is still somewhat in early stages, but man am I looking forward for the upcoming updates. Take all the time you guys need, I started my own VN, got in it for about 3 months, stopped. Underestimated how damn time extensive it is. Got a lot of respect to the authors and creators out there. Goodluck on the Project!
Hello! I found the game very interesting and cool, and I wanted to know if you are thinking about translating the game into Portuguese? I particularly liked it a lot, and being a Brazilian, I would really like to play this game again in Portuguese!
ah como eu te entendo!! essas vn poderiam todas ter uma traduçãozinha br né? kkkk i hope they learn your comment and give an answer :3
Hello! Thank you so much for your kind words and enthusiasm about the game! We’re thrilled to hear that you enjoyed it. Once the game is finished, we’re planning to add official translations of a few languages, including Portuguese, so anyone can fully enjoy it!
I'm really excited about this! It would be great to have a Portuguese translation. And one more thing, I wanted to report a problem, during gameplay, randomly, the game crashes and closes. Honestly, I have no idea what's going on. I tried searching about this problem on YouTube but I couldn't find anything. I wanted to ask if you guys know what's going on?
(Note: The issue is happening on the Android version)
Good afternoon
I'm a representative of the"Fluffy Paw", visual novel translation team of enthusiasts. We are interested in your visual novel and would like to work on its translation into Russian.
Therefore, I'm writing to ask for your permission to translate your visual novel and publish translated version on our boosty(https://boosty.to/ruwoolf). We post translation of the novel for a paid subscription for a period of two weeks, and afterwards we publish it for free public access.
Without any doubts, our side is ready to assure :
1) That we won`t translate or publish your novel builds if they are considered in paid access on your Patreon (or other recourses). We translate and publish only public builds of novels.
2) We make sure to include a link to your original novel and your social media as the author of the novel.
3) If you are interested in a Russian translation, we will also be able to send you tl russian files so that you can directly implement the translation into your work.
We are looking forward for your answer. Have a great day )
Good afternoon!
Thank you for reaching out and for your interest in translating our visual novel.
Please feel free to reach out to me on Telegram so we can discuss the details further.