Our Shared Lie

Since I got -11 downvotes I think it'd be best if I explain what's going wrong. Again, not doing this in the spirit of disparaging a fellow writer, far from it! They either have poor planning skills and are showing their characters future personality traits too early, or they are suffering some kind of prefrontal cortex damage or autism, making it difficult for non neurodivergent people to follow along. 

How does one go wrong with that they are supposed to write? Well consider the medium of Visual Novels. Suppose a CGs shows a lion hunched over scratching his chin. The writer need not write that in "The feline lowers his body while fitting his paw in his chin..." And yet this is what happens. As a writer, you have to consider your reader's time and entertainment level. Cutting is an importing tool in your editor's repertoire. And if a writer can't self edit because of their ego telling them not to judge themselves, then.... You kinda have a crappy writer who is never going to be capable of improving. It's all downhill from there and doubling down any time someone gives advice.

As for entertainment, well let's go back to when they examine the watch again. The MC does an examination of it and then declares it a mechanism. So far, all it does is display "0.5%". A button exists, but none of the characters so far can interact with it. / Immediately, as a reader, this sounds like a 0.5% survival chance and the big button is supposed to be some kind of kill history? As a rational person and not someone who goes with the flow, I am constantly making assumptions. It feels great to get things right. It feels anxiety inducing to get them wrong. It feels generally uncomfortable if my expectations aren't met. It feels too boring if I can see where this is going. / Let's move on... They encounter (supposedly friendly?) people who are hostile and trying to kill them... Okay... This feels boring because I saw this coming. Can't you as the writer redo this so the foreshadowing isn't ruined? I don't really count being descriptive during the mysterious watch and thrilling confrontations as entertainment. That's too surface level. If you exclude the spelling and grammar, even a 6 year old can evoke a sense of mystery in an unknown mechanism or a thrilling confrontation with a bigger person with a weapon trying to bring an innocent smaller defenseless person harm. But we are +18. It takes more to entertain us than just making things more mysterious or making the weapons/species more dangerous. Sadly, this is the part where no one else can help you. It's up to your imagination and craftiness.

I don't know where to begin with their broken rationalizations... The whole thing is like this. Whenever the MC takes a moment away from studying or introspecting, we find him in situations he shouldnt be in. Just imagine yourself a bird looking at things unfold. It seems random. Never mind some of the internal stuff going on relies on some leaps of faith. If we go back to that watch for example, when the MC is studying it, trying to figure it out, he then declares it (not assumes it) is a mechanism. That implies there is a gimmick or more to it than what we can see. And he got it right, when just a moment ago his best guess was it was a watch with a TV screen. Now where did this divine providence come from? Does the writer say the MC suddenly remembers seeing something like this? No. Opposite in fact. These anthros might not even have their version of an Apple Watch. Which is why it is strange and confusing if the technology wherever they are appears to be advanced. Advanced enough to even give them amnesia. The whole thing feels like a cross between Hunger Games and Saw with a tech gimmick. And it tries hard to be that without first giving the proper logic/exposition. Part of the entertainment is ruined because I can see where this is going before it is even explained. Im not interested in the lie because everyone so far is murderous and I probably know what psychopaths would want to lie about. You have not given us the time to bond with whoever is "ours" in Our Shared Lie. Both together, I don't even think this VN was written for someone like me... Or for most people... Im down for some drama and discovering the shocking truth the MC has been hiding... But ya kinda made me uninterested and presumptive with the poor planning of how/when things got revealed. Take Echo for example. For someone playing it for a first time they'd never guess the MC was a murderer until the last 8/10ths of the game, perhaps it might even skip their head. It almost did with my first playthrough (Leo). Looking back it all made sense. But I never expected them to take that direction. I was always pleasantly surprised (even if it is shocking). The pay off was worth it. There is no pay off here because the writer refuses to build it up before thrusting us into danger or making us guess what the lie is. No one randomly appears on an island with killers because theyre innocent. But a reunion gone wrong due to paranormal activity? No one would guess the MC deserves that until they uncover the truth at least half way into any route. 

not even two minutes in and I'm already getting flashbacks 😭

i can't unsee this his nose looks like a smiley face :)

Rereading for a third time while waiting for v0.3 :]

That first part was INTENSE! I hope you keep this VN alive, no matter how long it takes. Tiene mucho potencial esta historia, por favor, no la dejen morir.

Love the game and the theme surrounding it. I know the game is still somewhat in early stages, but man am I looking forward for the upcoming updates. Take all the time you guys need, I started my own VN, got in it for about 3 months, stopped. Underestimated how damn time extensive it is. Got a lot of respect to the authors and creators out there. Goodluck on the Project!

IM OBSESSED, you guys are truly making a masterpiece, keep going!

hi I'm mani

I just wish it wouldn't end that soon ): 

I have a bad headache that how it ended I just wanted to say " L team pleaaaseeeeee make the part 2 pleaseeee It have bean a year since you didn't do any progress please make the chapter two I need it or else I will end up my whole carrier" 

anyway thank you by creating this grate game 

I just wanted to say this is really good I love this so far and I can't wait to see how it plays out but I also wanted to address some concerns I have for slur usage there were times where I saw the use of the r slur it did make me really uncomfortable as someone with multiple disabilities and I'm sure it made it made other people here uncomfortable as well other than that this is really great

Can you make a Portuguese version? I always ask this in games, but no one ever paid me any attention.

Man this game is incredible!! The details, the style, the soundtracks.. everything is awesome!! You guys are doing very well!

idk but this feels like a HUGE danganropa scenario where we accepcted to take part in this experiment
were we are all forced to loose our memorys and wake up in a place where we have no memory of

I am in love with how this is going already, and I cannot wait to see more if the time comes! 

Even if there are some errors; the writing is just wonderful! Yes, some words were used wrong, but that’s expected, especially when most people whose mother tongue is english make those same mistakes, if not more frequently. It’s absolutely incredible how everything is structured, give yourselves a pat in the back for this, truly. 

I am more than happy to wait as long as it takes for an update on this visual novel, and hoping that any remaining struggles you are fighting soon vanish. 

933 is the finest dude ever by the way thank you for creating such godsend… okay byebye

Are there any nsfw?

Are their names meaningful?I guess V for Vulpes and PT for Panthera tigris.But I don't know what's the meaning of OR AL LC.They don't exactly match their scientific names, so the pattern I'm looking for is probably incorrect.But I like the game. I'm just curious about the meaning of their names.

bruh, the waiting time is going to kill from the inside ;(

I don't know why but this VN really makes me want to wait for the sequel because frankly it's heavy from the start :)

This is the kind of VN in early development stage that, since there is only a few lore elements showed, i can't help but create hundreds and hundreds of various theories on how it all fits together.

i found some grammar errors that you can fix in the beginning when the character says "but i do not do it." it would be better to say "but i don't." and when the thig on the top left pops up that says "you should avoid hurt your snout in the future" you should change it to "you should avoid hurting your snout in the future" and when the lion says "with this sudden situation we were suddenly put into"  you should change it to "with this situation that we were suddenly put into" and at the very beginning when it says something about sand and gravel pressing in your back it would be better to say "Sand and gravel? they press into my back and stick to my skin like they want to pull me back into the ground" and a lot of other sentences are redundant and sometimes it seems like you try too hard to be poetic and it becomes a little bit confusing

- when the mc looks over the cliff you should put "why can't i... remember anything?" basically switch the cant and i.

- change "why im here!?" to "why am i here!?" (at the cliff scene)

- "making my skin slips from his touch" doesnt really make sence to me 

BTW ill put more errors if i find anymore

Me gustó mucho, creo que es momento de obsesionarme y pensar en headcanons y en cosas que podrían pasar en la historia mientras voy en el transporte publico.

This is my first time commenting asking for more. I usually wait for updates patiently, but this time I just can't. The prologue was so good! I need more of this story (and more of the cute, silly lion) as soon as possible!

Seriously, I can't wait for the next update. I can feel this is going to be one of my favorites visual novels once it is complete.

hey there!

I've loved the novel so far! It feels fresh and fantastic 

Although I have a question, I loved the OST of this novel and I wanted to see if there is a place to download it from

Hello there, I'm translating this fvn into Chinese and got some problem about the title translation. so I'm here asking for help.

can you text me xxxxxxx in twetter or xxxxxxx in Discord🙏🏻. thx a lot

thankyou for the update 🙏

Yessssss new update :3!